My Contribution to the Class..

in our Insight Into Daily Life, i have contributed by writing three different comments on peoeple in our classes blogs. those three people are ; michelle s., terrance, and sharon. what i did in my comments is let them know what they did good and bad. i also related to all of their papers because it ended up that i had alot in common with what they had to say!.

TERRANCE'S COMMENT I WROTE: "this essay is very good i agree with a couple of things. the first thing is how they restrict so many diffeernt things in schools. like for example if mr.fanning was to walk by our class when andys teaching us a massage, im sure he would quesiton it and think..this isnt right...so i agree with that. i also agree alot with the fact that you mentioned about girls being able to hold hands and kiss on the check while if guys do that...they would get made fun of so much. i think its weird, i even think its weird that girls have to have that kiss on the cheek everyy time we see eachother, its kind of annoying.
but overall this mini essay is very good!"

SHARRON'S COMMENT I WROTE: "like like this essay beacuse it was very easy to read in general. i liked how you seperated everything into lil' chunks, this way it didnt bore me. as i was reading i was able to relate to you because most of what you wrote was so true for myself also . i agree with the thing where you dont open up as much with people who you dont really knwo because you dont want them knowing your life all at once, and who knows they might use it agaisnt you.
i also found in common with you , the fact that you said you were shy and dont talk as much, im the same exact way i tend to stay quite allthe time. well overall nice essay and points!"

MICHELLE S'S COMMENT I WROTE:"i think that this intro is very good and intreging! you should keep up the work and get to the body paragraphs.
but i do agree with waht you said about not putting the more important things in front of you , like i usually end up hanging out with friends in an apt. instead of going on the grass in central park.
but overall, you should keep up the good work and get past the introduction! good luck!!"


OTHER COMMENTS:i am very quite in class and try to contribute but im shy. im going to work on that though for next semester!